For my peer review partners, I reviewed Ashley’s paper and Abby reviewed mine. We followed the same peer review guidelines that were given to us for the previous projects. This was helpful in the sense that I could make sure I had all of the necessary parts, and if not, I could see what parts needed to be added. I could also see which parts needed more elaboration or things missing. I know I need more feedback with tying my…
Thesis: Data collection can be a beneficial way for researchers to understand today’s mental health crisis, as well as develop ways to overcome it. I plan on doing a 5 page essay for my project.
I feel like in this project, I really improved my active reading abilities. Active reading is something I have always struggled with but I am continuing to learn good strategies for it as this class goes on. When I was reading the three sources for our project, I annotated them using two different strategies. I used color coding to make notes of the different pieces of the text, such as the claims, evidence, structure, and questions. I also used the…
She was so excited to meet me for the first time. Not to brag, but I was the first big purchase she had made completely on her own. That honeymoon phase is something I’ll never forget: she wouldn’t stop showing me off to her friends, she cranked up the volume of every noise I made just because she loved the sound. I would sing nonstop all day with new notifications and messages from her groups of friends. That phase died…
I began my surface-level editing by using the search tool to find all of the places where I use commas. When I write, whether it be nonfiction or fiction, I tend to use a lot of commas. I identified each comma I came across as either introductory, comma splice, or a serial comma. If I could not classify the comma into one of the three categories, I looked at whether or not I needed it. I either deleted it, changed…
For my pre-writing activity this time, I chose to just answer the questions provided in our project’s document. It was effective in getting me to analyze all the parts that could be included in my essay. I think the prompted questions were very helpful in allowing me to explore all the different routes I could go with my essay. By answering all of them, I identified what areas were strongest and should be included in the essay. I could also…
I found annotating with the “chunking” method to be very useful in categorizing information so you can easily find it again when doing a later assignment. For example, when you write an essay about the topic later, you can easily find where there is evidence for you to reference. It is also an easy way to simplify the structure of the essay. However, I don’t feel like this method is very engaging for the reader. The most engagement you are…
The rapid advancement of technology is drastically changing the way that young members of the current generation develop [Topic]. Constant use of technology is leading to isolation, which can progress into deeper mental health issues [Restriction]. Jean M. Twenge, an American psychology professor, addresses the fact that teens are spending more time alone on their phones rather than building physical relationships with the people around them [Exhibit]. This raises a concern because as teens isolate themselves more from the real…
Over the long fall weekend, I went on a three day camping trip in Acadia. I lost cell service about an hour into our ride up on Friday morning, and I did not get it back until our ride home on Sunday night. During this time I was unable to use my phone to connect to others even if I wanted to. Leading up to the trip, I was spending a lot of my days dealing with overwhelming drama from…
Turkle’s main argument in this TED talk is that as technology gets more advanced and as we begin to rely on it more, we expect more from it than we do real interactions. An example that Turkle mentions is when she discusses the story of a woman bonding with a robot. The woman had lost a child and she found comfort in talking to a robot that resembled a child (10:04). This shows Turkle’s argument in the fact that the…
